Self-Reflection: Demonia Shaker 100: Worth the Hype?
The task given was to write a review over a product sourced in our own home, this could’ve ranged from a hair styling device to a kitchen appliance. I chose to write a review on a pair of boots that I have been wanting for a couple years now. I couldn’t really come up with anything in my house that was worthy of a full-on review, so I decided to look at the footwear that I have. In terms of completing the initial task, I feel as though I delivered a thoughtful review. None of what was said within the review was a lie, it was all my true feelings on their function and capability. I tried not to go too into detail about the sizing, since that can honestly be its own paper. Going through the required information about the product, I made sure to phrase things the way that I’d normally see them on a store website, etc. Although these review papers are a bit more formal and criteria, it is key to keep the same structure and vocabulary words typically used in reviews for this specific product.
When writing out this review, I made sure to keep the history of the brand a bit short; seeing as though the focus of the paper is the product themselves. As interesting as it was to go back and research the brand that makes all these insane platformed boots/heels, it gets a bit redundant to keep regurgitating the same information. The organization of my paper flows freely, but it is very easy to tell which paragraph centers over what aspect. There is a five-paragraph structure: Introduction/History, Pricing/Sources, Sizing, Attitude Change, & Conclusion. If the reader would want to go back to reread any of the previous information, they could easily do so. A lot of the ideas that are widely spoken about in their respective paragraphs are also connected throughout the paper, bettering the cohesion and feel of the review. I provided two images, which I wish I would have properly labeled, to show visuals of the boots. The first image is what the boots are supposed to look like when on, the second image is how they look on me. With the second image, I decided to add it to properly visualize what I was referring to: the boots fit me too tight, so I showed how tight they truly fit. Adding too many visuals would’ve taken away from the substance of the essay, which wouldn’t have been good to keep the attention of the reader.
There are a couple more things I’d add onto my paper to elevate it. I wish I would have worked on a better title; what I currently have isn’t the worst, but I feel as though I could’ve come up with something a bit more intriguing than what first came to mind. Another thing I would add to my paper would be more description, it would add to the reader’s understanding of the boots and why this is a good investment. Lastly, I would add perhaps a sentence or two that builds off the history of the company. I was too scared that adding on would seem too repetitive, but now I see that this would have added onto the reader’s understanding. Too much history isn’t bad, as long as you keep your work engaging.
